Tuesday, March 8, 2011

Comfort Food from Lebanon

[Written for The Index] 

The first thing to notice is the tacky toy dispensers, various tattoo options 50 cents a piece, little voodoo dolls and bok choy boys that come out of the machine down a shoot in little containers that look like flying saucers. A mural stands before waiting customers, a serene landscape depicting a shepherd herding his flock near a river and mountains in the distance.

Patrons walk past the front counter and can catch a glimpse of the kitchen scene through the order window. To the left of the first few tables is a mural of a Lebanese woman, behind a veil, making pita over an open flame, sand and heat and camels are in the distant background.

The peachy orange walls and light-brown grated floor tiles leave much to be desired. Shawarma King is an unimpressive restaurant, until you try their food.

It is a seat yourself restaurant. In the back seating area guests are greeted with a slightly off rendition of the Dome of the Rock painted on one of the back walls in the dining area. Its proportions are somewhat askew though it is quite beautiful.

There is a jade tree on the sill of one of the giant windows among other plants and middle-eastern décor like pots and a water jug. A WMU flag is represented on one side of the room, supporting the Western Bronco’s. A couple of Shawarma King T-shirts also adorn the walls. One shows the front design while the other reveals the back.

The appetizers arrived almost immediately after they were requested, Hummus, Falafel, and Meat Grape Leaves. The first thing to notice before the taste is the incredible portion sizes. Lebanese cuisine is similar those of many countries in the Eastern Mediterranean but according to my Lebanese friends, it’s the best. The portion sizes are culturally significant because a common practice in the middle-east is to be host to group of people. This gives the meals a very communal feel which is also why it begins with mezze, small savory dishes, leading up to the main courses. Once the taste hits you this becomes even more important because you’ll want to keep coming back for more.

The Grape Leaves had a unique flavor—rice and lamb are wrapped up in a tight leafy roll. Lemon juice adds a subtle sweetness but the overall taste is somewhat dry. The Falafel on the other hand is divine. Herbs, spices and chick pea flour fried to perfection and dipped in lumpy fresh yogurt, the Falafel is crunchy and doughy in just the right proportion. It’s like a Lebanese hush puppy that’s tastes healthier and more delicious. And in the east it it’s different wherever you go—quick, easy, and plentiful Falafel is sold from small shops set up out in the open like hotdogs in American big cities.

Hommous is the yummy constant that keeps coming back throughout the meal. Paprika, lemon juice, parsley, onions and tomato tastes light and refreshing garnished with real Mediterranean olives, the hommous starts the meal off right.

The Lentil soup was very light, a bright yellow color, and a little salty. I have had better. But the Fattoush was incredible. The house dressing was savory and not too sweet. The fried pita was better than any crouton in this middle-eastern salad.
The service continued to be fast, polite and knowledgeable. I was delighted to find Coke on the drink list rather than Pepsi. On Saturday night there was a constant stream of customers and if dining in isn’t for you they also deliver take out.

On to the main courses, eastern sounding music in the back ground is a subtle addition to atmosphere, as Beef Galaya, Arayas, Mixed Kabab, Mixed Shawarma and a Beef Shawarma sandwich are some of the best. The tambourine doesn’t quite drown out the child screaming at the table next to me but the Galaya almost does. The sauce is excellent in this sauté of beef, fresh vegetables, herbs, and spices.

The Arayas, ground beef, tomato, onion, parsley, homemade spice and toasted in pita bread, is full of flavor and well spiced. Mixed Kabab is the tenderest meat on the table. The Mixed Shawarma with fries fell a little flat—a little dry but with yogurt it has a good flavor and the fries are as well done, thick and potatoey. But the beefy, light, fresh flavor of the Beef Shawarma sandwich is a great menu item that tastes homey and full of mom’s love. The cardamom tea took too long to try but Shawarma King isn’t the kind of place you only visit once.

11 comments:

  1. Hi Elaine,
    Very nice first draft! You do a wonderful job of setting up the scene by giving your readers a good dose of details and sensory images that fleshes out the restaurant in my mind. It sounds like you were able to try a wide variety of dishes and I liked how you offset the negative experiences with the positive ones.
    You mentioned a time or two you lebanese friends. I think that's a nice touch to your article because it helps establish authority. I wanted to know more about them, however. Were they there with you at the restaurant? I'm not sure if we're supposed to talk about the other people who were there with us, but perhaps since your friends could be a useful cultural tool it would be appropriate.
    My other suggestion for your review is to avoid words like "flour fried to perfection," and "divine." See if you can describe your experience with more concrete examples since my idea of fried to perfection could be different from yours.
    All in all, beautiful job!!

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  2. Elaine,

    I love how you set the scene with the toy dispensers at the beginning of your piece--but you need to say the name of the restaurant, if not in the title, at least in the opening paragraph!

    You really establish your authority as a speaker when you give background about why the portion sizes are larger in Lebanese cuisine and when you talk about variations of Falafel in the East. Btw, what is Fattoush? Is it the house dressing?

    Also, you have a great voice for most of the piece--but towards the end you switch to using past tense.

    The ending is quite abrupt, and I wanted more description of the entrees since you do such a good job describing the previous dishes.

    What do you mean by "eastern" and the "east"? Can you make this more clear in your piece?

    Nice start--I love Shawarma King food but I've never been inside the actual restaurant.

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  3. Elaine, you've got a good start here. I agree with Julia, I really wanted to be grounded in the restaurant earlier in the piece, both with the name and the location (on Westnedge, right?).

    You say you're writing for the Index, but then it isn't made clear that you're writing to the college student audience anywhere in the review. This would help make you more credible. Also, thinking about your audience and providing them with suggestions on what to get (as opposed to a play-by-play of your dining experience) would serve your reader well.

    You mentioned late in the piece that the "service continued to be fast, polite and knowledgeable," but I didn't remember reading about how they were all of those things in the first place. Hearing more about the wait staff and the service would help the review overall.

    I was quite confused by the sentence reading: "And in the east it it’s different wherever you go—quick, easy, and plentiful Falafel is sold from small shops set up out in the open like hotdogs in American big cities." I'm not sure what you were trying to get across here about "the east," but I think it can probably be cleared up easily.

    We talked in workshop today about writing in the present tense (rather than the past) so that it seems like an ongoing experience that anyone could have (as opposed to your specific experienced that has already taken place). I think that by making this shift (and perhaps avoiding the use of the narrative 'I') your review can be strengthened and gain authority.

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  4. Great start, Elaine!

    Your beginning descriptive details are wonderful. The specificity really works at this early point, and sets us up for what kind of restaurant this is. One thing that could be added: ground us in location earlier on? If I hadn't read your anticipation paragraph, I would've been confused as to where you were!

    I noticed that in a few places you switched from past to present tense, and that should be a pretty easy fix; I know that we talked about using present tense as a more credible route than past. I also wanted more voice throughout this -- by the end it's more prominent, but in earlier sections it's hard to know what the narrator/reviewer is like.

    You did a great job of picking out certain elements of dishes and analyzing them; even if one dish wasn't great, there were parts of it that did stand out.
    This is a really great start, can't wait to see the final draft!

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  5. Good job describing the restaurant's decor. I also liked what other people have already said about mentioning your Lebanese friends and the authority it lends to your review.

    Covering four different food items in one paragraph feels cluttered and I don't really get a sense of each of the dishes individually. Try spreading out the description and expending each of the dishes.

    I'd like to see more of a judgment about the decor and the atmosphere. Right now we just have a description of what the restaurant looks like, but I'd like to see more about how that actually works.

    Something small: "Falafel is sold from small shops set up out in the open like hotdogs in American big cities." The way this reads now, hotdogs are sitting on streets and selling things. You should change it to "hotdog stands."

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  6. Elaine

    I agree with a few people before me that I wanted to know the name and location of the place in the very beginning. I found myself wondering if I had missed something or if you had forgotten to put it in. I like the surprise element of putting it later in the piece, but it just got confusing.

    I also think that hushpuppy disconnected me from the piece. I hadn't ever heard of them before coming to Michigan and I'm still not exactly sure what they are. I also wanted to know more about these Lebanese friends. I agree with Alaina and others that it does give you authority, but they need a little more background in order to be believable.

    Also, the easy fix of staying in the same tense and avoiding you, I and me will really professionalize your piece.

    You've got a nice start here. With some more authority I think you'd have a strong piece.

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  7. I agree with Hannah on developing authority. I would also add that I think right now this review is relying on a perceived tone of voice to note that it's a review... and as a result we get less of your voice. Authority is going to lie more in the research and the details than trying to mimic what we've seen before us.
    If this were a piece for The Index, I think it would be good to have a clearer opinion of your experience to detail. Even if it's a mixed review, outlining that from a point earlier in the piece is going to be helpful.

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  8. I have to echo some of the things people have said before me: I don't necessarily think the name of the restaurant needs to always be in the lede, but in your case, I think it's definitely necessary. Especially since you're talking about the first thing you see when you walk in...so the reader should know what he/she is walking into.
    I think you have a good "but"; it's easy to pull out. I wonder, though, if you have a little too much description of the atmosphere in the beginning. I felt like you had some descriptions (like of the t-shirts and the mural) that didn't need as long of an explanation as you gave them.

    Also, we've talked in class about avoiding bringing ourselves into these pieces, and you do that pretty often with you and "your Lebanese friends" and the babies crying next to you, etc.

    I really liked your description of the appetizers though! The part about the filafel was great; I liked the "Lebanese hush puppy." I thought the ending was abrupt as well, as others have said.

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  9. Elaine, excellent review! I was happy to see that you tried so many items. You gave the reader lots of information. Your descriptions of food are also really well done and you captured the atmosphere of the place very well. I like how it seems to start as a negative review until you get to the food, which makes the trip worth it. Also, I loved that you included that they serve Coke instead of Pepsi, definitely something to note for your Kzoo audience.
    As far as suggestions go, I think the transition from the restaurant to the food was a little abrupt. Maybe talk about ordering the food, or what it looks like before jumping right into the appetizers themselves.
    I liked how you tried to combine the noise level in the restaurant with the arrival of the main course, but that paragraph is a little confusing.
    Other than that though, great first draft!

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  10. Mmm, you do a wonderful job of giving us such vivid discriptions of the food! i really liked the depth into which you went with that, while still balanceing out the rest. I might add in a bit about the pricing, or talk a little more about service, but on the whole, it's pretty good. Lastly, the ending was a little bit abrupt, maybe that's something to be worked on?

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  11. Elaine,

    You do a nice job with your food descriptions, but I would suggest adding more to them.

    Also, you spend a lot of time describing the place but don’t really give a clear opinion on it’s affect for you.

    With some clarification and some elaboration, you’ll have a great review!

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